Wednesday, October 13, 2010

Observation: Pain


Courtesy of Deviant Art

The face tells the story of the road most traveled,
an arduous journey
through a winding, dark and brambly path
that has gifted wounds -
wounds not easily healed,
for they bleed, seep
unremitting
purging the agony within.

And in the throat,
the muted scream that begs escape,
needing to voice the cries that reside within.


*An observation of a friend who is currently going through some difficult times....

25 comments:

dustus said...

Your poem reminds me of poets who write because it's a cathartic experience for them. Nice flow and word choice. An excellent One Shot! Thanks for linking up with us :)

Wine and Words said...

I love the indication that wounds are a gift, for often they are. Wonderful poem.

Claudia said...

you captured that pain so well in your poem - it screams from between the lines..nice work!

Brian Miller said...

whew. heavy with emotion...we can get lost on that road quite easy...tight 55.

my 55

lime said...

ironically some people who ooze such pain think they have effectively hidden it. may your friend find relief and peace.

G-Man said...

Rebecca...
This was indeed an emotion filled poem.
Loved your 55.
You got it goin on girl...
Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

moondustwriter said...

I feel a constriction of sorts holding back not allowing the emotion, the pain to be freed.

This piece evokes contemplation

Nice one

moonie smiles

Stranger said...

Interesting how the road most traveled is brambly and wounding. Beautiful writing here.

ds said...

You make us feel those cries as if they were our own. Beautifully done. Thank you.

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

Very intense, and thought provoking!!! And the graphic to go with your 55 is outstanding.


My 55 is a double whammy this week, two for the price of one. Of course, as always, you need to scroll down below my Friday's Show n Tell.

The link is HERE I'd love to have you stop by for a visit.

Eric Alder said...

I hope your friend finds solace soon. Sorrowful 55.

Jannie Funster said...

I too hope your friend finds solace soon. Sounds like she is lucky to have a friend such as you.

Faces do tell of the journey. I hope your journey is happy today and every day.

gautami tripathy said...

Writing is such a release. I can feel that here..

extraction

Monkey Man said...

Gifted Wounds. That has resonance. Great 55.
My 55 is HERE .

patty said...

Short poem and yet I am captured at the first line, "the face tells the story of the road most traveled" I felt the pain in your poem, while in the background of my mind various faces came into view, including my own.
Great One Shot xo

PattiKen said...

You show real compassion for your friend with this lovely piece. I hope she finds peace soon.

Prayer Girl said...

Anguished feelings do need escape. That is where healing lies. This is a beautiful 55.

HERE IS MINE

PG

Leo said...

You bring out that anguish well, and only in escape resides solace and healing!

Morning Mist - My One Shot

Olivia said...

very well expressed your anger here..:D

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Dianne said...

Hmm, I feel the pain in this, and the immense need! nice 55
my scary 55 is HERE

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Dianne

Judie said...

I think we all have felt that at one time or another. Well written--powerful and moving.

Laura said...

I can feel her pain as you write...well done Rebecca.

Greenfingers said...

Even that title - Observation: Pain, did it for me.
Brilliant...

Carrie Burtt said...

Rebecca you write of it as if you have lived it....truly amazing poem!
:-)